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Originally Posted by LostAndCrazy
Watching you,
As you lay dyiing,
My heart bled with yours.
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You lack the system of haiku 
It is 5-7-5 in most cases.
Yours is 3-5-5
You may not be the only one who has done this, but I caught it easily just by reading it.
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"Do not judge, or you too will be judged. For in the same way you judge others, you will be judged and with the measure you use, it will be measured to you" The Bible (Matthew 7:12)
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