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Okay, let's go poem by poem. First one is good. I love how you talk about utopia and describe it as only place where love can happen.
Second poem is interesting, very good I can say, just you can't say:
A young, man stands alone
If you start talking about a man, young must be together with MAN, because young is adjective for noun. You can't break adjective from noun with coma, it just doesn't have sense. But poem is good.
Third one is just amazing. Last verse is just amazing.
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