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Old 01-06-2009, 12:25 PM   #8
Tam Li Hua
 
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First story: Sounds like a good start to a longer story, but not quite complete.

Very good start, though.

Second story: Sounds like a good campfire story, only I would love to know why the people were white with red eyes. Were they albino humans? Or a different sort of creature? And why did walking away save the man's life? Did the creatures' eyes have pupils? If so, wouldn't the man have seen the pupil in the eye as well as the color red? [Sorry for all the questions; I'm terribly analytical when it comes to stories..]
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