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Old 12-08-2010, 09:07 AM   #21
Apathy's_Child
 
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Originally Posted by Despanan View Post
I like how it's our fault. I would totally unleash Zombies on Gnet for the Lulz.

One note thought, I would've added these lines:


Kontan: Yeah, and YOU wanted KammadinniBOOOYAH! I TOLD you he was too powerful, but you said you would totally ruin his shit if he even LOOKED at you wrong! You said you knew karate!

Despanan: I do know karate!

Kontan: No you don't!

Despanan: Fuck you, asshole!

Kontan: No! Nonono! Fuck YOU, asshole!!
Yeah, I've seen a few things I'd change on a read-back. Oddly enough that was one - I wished I'd had you try to prove your mad karate skillz and nearly fall off the bus shelter in the process, with Kontan refusing to help you up until you to say HE'S the brains of the op and the apocalypse IS all your fault. I'm currently shitting these things out in like 20-30 minutes at work then posting, but maybe I'll start sitting on them for a day. Flaws are way easier to pick out with a little distance.
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