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Literature Please come visit. People get upset, write poetry about it, and post it here. Sometimes we also talk about books. |
08-07-2010, 05:48 PM
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Join Date: Jul 2010
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I Don't Fit In
If nobody understands me why don't I have cut marks on my arms
I hang out with emo kids all the time but i'm a goth how does that work out
I bite I'm a vampire I've been bitten
Some ask who I am and what I am the reply is always the same I am Darkemostar a vampire-angel
(I'm not acutually emo just goth srry for the misunderstanding if there is/was one!)
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08-07-2010, 06:04 PM
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#2
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Join Date: Aug 2009
Posts: 2,932
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No wonder you thought the other shit people post was good.
I really want to hit you.
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Originally Posted by KissMeDeadly
You fucking people [war veterans] are only a step below entitled rich kids, the only difference being you had to do and witness horrible things, instead of being given everything.
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real classy
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08-07-2010, 06:07 PM
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#3
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Join Date: Mar 2009
Location: Fiddler's Green
Posts: 1,406
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I can seriously feel all the decent pieces slowly burn away as they're replaced with this useless archive. That wasn't even a fucking poem.
You know what, I'm gonna bite and try this hoe.
HEY CHICK, IF YOU'RE GOTH AND NOT EMO HOW COME YOUR USERNAME IS DARK EMO STAR?
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08-07-2010, 06:10 PM
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#4
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Join Date: Mar 2009
Location: Fiddler's Green
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Quote:
(I'm not acutually emo just goth srry for the misunderstanding if there is/was one!)
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THANK GOD. I needed that. Now us elite goths can sleep in the shadows...in peace.
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08-08-2010, 10:01 AM
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#5
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Join Date: Jul 2010
Posts: 98
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@ Sinjob: Yet again GET THE FUCK OUT OF HERE!
@ Alan: YOU TO!
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08-08-2010, 10:26 AM
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#6
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Join Date: Jul 2010
Posts: 98
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@ Sinjob: I am NOT a hoe you fucking asshole!
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08-08-2010, 10:30 AM
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#7
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Join Date: Mar 2009
Location: Fiddler's Green
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You are so a hoe.
Look at the way you act and the rhymes you spit. Hoebag.
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08-08-2010, 10:39 AM
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#8
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Join Date: Aug 2010
Location: NYC
Posts: 61
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I don't understand what you are trying to convey in this piece, a sense of being miss understood, a sense of wanting to belong? There is no emotion in this, it's just blah.
Punctuation please, there are no question marks at the end of your questions, your line about biting and vampires makes no sense due to a lack of commas or periods.
a better use of line breaks would also make this poem a little better.
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08-08-2010, 10:43 AM
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#9
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Join Date: Jul 2010
Posts: 98
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I Don't care about what you say sinjob i could have my cousin track you down!
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08-08-2010, 10:45 AM
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#10
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Join Date: Mar 2009
Location: Fiddler's Green
Posts: 1,406
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Really? With the four years of tae-kwon doe under my wing and him not knowing where I am, it's safe to say I'll be his trouble not he'll be mine.
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08-08-2010, 10:47 AM
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#11
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Join Date: Jul 2010
Posts: 98
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Jerk! i'm calling him right now!
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08-08-2010, 10:49 AM
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#12
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Join Date: Mar 2009
Location: Fiddler's Green
Posts: 1,406
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Okay. Tell him not to forget his dildos and Vaseline!
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08-08-2010, 10:50 AM
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#13
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Join Date: Jul 2010
Posts: 98
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he says that you should go to hell!
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08-08-2010, 10:51 AM
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#14
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Join Date: Mar 2009
Location: Fiddler's Green
Posts: 1,406
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Tell him I'm waiting with the blow-up doll now.
Get real, sistah. I'll rip your cousin a new one.
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08-08-2010, 10:54 AM
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Join Date: Jul 2010
Posts: 98
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Goodbye!!!!
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08-08-2010, 10:55 AM
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#16
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Join Date: Mar 2009
Location: Fiddler's Green
Posts: 1,406
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Quote:
Originally Posted by Darkemostar
Goodbye!!!!
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Baby come back with your meaningless rants. I want you to see your cousin beg for his life!
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08-08-2010, 12:08 PM
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#17
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Join Date: Aug 2010
Location: NYC
Posts: 61
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Quote:
Originally Posted by Sinjob
Baby come back with your meaningless rants. I want you to see your cousin beg for his life!
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Sinjob: you're mean, horrible and incorrigible...
and it's funny.
Although I really do feel bad for her.
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08-08-2010, 02:21 PM
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#18
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Join Date: Mar 2009
Location: Fiddler's Green
Posts: 1,406
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As soon as she writes a poem that's not whiny and generic, I will continue to be snide and insult her.
Toughen that writing ability up.
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08-09-2010, 07:31 AM
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#19
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Join Date: Jul 2010
Posts: 98
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Sinjob you are the biggest jerk I've ever met! Didn't you get Lady Bewinter's message to leave me alone!
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08-09-2010, 08:54 AM
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#20
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Join Date: Mar 2009
Location: Fiddler's Green
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Quote:
Originally Posted by Darkemostar
Sinjob you are the biggest jerk I've ever met! Didn't you get Lady Bewinter's message to leave me alone!
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I think I'll take my chances in the case of BOUNTY HUNTER LADY BEWINTER!
Because unless this is your cousin,
http://1.bp.blogspot.com/_7FAsUT6FeP.../arizona10.jpg
(who wrote the message on YOUR account) I won't stop my critiques any time soon.
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08-09-2010, 09:24 AM
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Join Date: Oct 2007
Location: Heaven and Earth
Posts: 2,606
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Quote:
Originally Posted by Azareal Crow
I don't understand what you are trying to convey in this piece, a sense of being miss understood, a sense of wanting to belong? There is no emotion in this, it's just blah.
Punctuation please, there are no question marks at the end of your questions, your line about biting and vampires makes no sense due to a lack of commas or periods.
a better use of line breaks would also make this poem a little better.
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I must agree with this.
Also, other than Angel from the Buffy series, I don't know what a vampire-angel is..
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08-09-2010, 02:35 PM
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#22
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Join Date: Aug 2010
Location: NYC
Posts: 61
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Quote:
Originally Posted by Tam Li Hua
I must agree with this.
Also, other than Angel from the Buffy series, I don't know what a vampire-angel is..
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It's apparently a being that is both and angel and a vampire, although I would also consider it quite the oxymoron, the natures are too different for them to be mixed in one being without the being suffering some serious mental damage.
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08-09-2010, 03:15 PM
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#23
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Join Date: Aug 2009
Posts: 2,932
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Why the fuck do you keep talking about a Lady Bewinter? I'm not following.
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Quote:
Originally Posted by KissMeDeadly
You fucking people [war veterans] are only a step below entitled rich kids, the only difference being you had to do and witness horrible things, instead of being given everything.
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real classy
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08-09-2010, 03:17 PM
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#24
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Join Date: Jul 2010
Posts: 98
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Quote:
Originally Posted by Sinjob
I think I'll take my chances in the case of BOUNTY HUNTER LADY BEWINTER!
Because unless this is your cousin, (who wrote the message on YOUR account) I won't stop my critiques any time soon.
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Lady Bewinter doesn't have an account yet so that's why she sent the message off my account. And she will have one soon just wait untill Wensday. Lady Bewinter, and I will send you another message as soon as she gets her account on Wensday. We'll send you a message from her account! I'll be over at her house again on Wensday afternoon after her collage thing so just wait and see!
Oh and it is NOT the case of Bounty Hunter Lady Bewinter. It's the case of a fourteen year old girl with two older cousins that could and would beat the crap out of you untill you begged for mercy!
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08-09-2010, 04:16 PM
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#25
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Join Date: Mar 2009
Location: Fiddler's Green
Posts: 1,406
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Quote:
Originally Posted by Alan
Why the fuck do you keep talking about a Lady Bewinter? I'm not following.
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It's kind of a funny story, you see.
She got her cousin to send me a private message on her account and say it's "Lady Bewinter" and she'll hunt me down if I keep talking shit. Yes I'm serious.
Darkemostar: Please drink fucking bleach. You think you can be threatening to someone like ME at all on the internet? No matter what you say you'll still be a retarded little kid who doesn't know how to fucking write. A hoe.
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