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Old 07-11-2007, 05:22 PM   #1
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All im worth.

If I give you all I'm worth would it be enough?

Or should I look under the cushions for a few more bucks?

You underestimate me, tell me I will never be good for it.

I always need to find some way to give you more more MORE.

Your never content with just a kiss or an "I love you more than life its self".

Maybe when you were young some one didn't love you enough.

And now I'll devote all my attention try to endure your hard words, rough hands, cold heart, and desperate screams, for more love.

I feel inadequate because I cant pull you together

(I'm unraveling with you.)

Your never happy unless I'm falling apart over you

You wont be satisfied till we bury each other

In sad songs, emptiness, and eventually Death.



(This is not about my own current romantic relationship, but it is a feeling I’ve felt before. My friend is in a relationship that remind me much of this. I tend to be attracted to and make friends with the type of guy or girl that needs allot, im weak for people who have issues. I just cant keep my self from trying to fix it, trying to make them love me, trying to make them happy.)



what do you think of this poem/thingy...
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Old 07-11-2007, 05:44 PM   #2
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It expresses exactly how I feel in my relationship.I think a lot of people will be able to identify with the feeling in this poem/thingy.
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Old 07-11-2007, 06:02 PM   #3
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"I feel inadequate because I can't pull you together." "You won't be satisfied till we bury each other."

I love those lines.
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Old 07-11-2007, 06:13 PM   #4
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I think my writeing is geting better with practice... YAY XD
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Opps sorry Typos ^
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You're beginning to find your style as a writer. It sort of reminds me of how I used to write when I first started. Keep it up .
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Old 07-11-2007, 06:35 PM   #7
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Do you think this would make a good song??
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