A poem and a song ^^;
 

I wrote the poem on my anxiety xD
And I wrote the song about the Night Stalker who was a serial killer from the 1980s named Richard Ramirez who would kill people and then have sex with them.
... So yeah... Hope it's not too horrible ^^;; I know my writing isn't nearly as good as the most of you... but I try =P

Anxious
My face gleems red,
Might as well be blood, though it is not.
I can't find my thoughts, I lost them in my rage.
I am numb; such feelings, I forgot.

My eyes won't open,
The are glued shut by the crust of my tears.
I feel guilty, for being who I am.
I felt guilty all these years.

And tis the day,
I find myself once again,
Here; in the land of sadness and the ocean of pain.

I try to take myself to a happy place,
but it is there where I don't feel safe.

My worry protects me
From what is to come.
My sadness is the shell of my fear.
My fear protects me,
from myself.

---

The Night Stalker
Ramirez and Bravewolf, making the pact
Joining in friendship and falling intact.
Ramirez and Vincow, was much not the same
The results were quite different and so was the blame.
It was in 1984, on June the 28th,
The man he was greedy, he wanted the bait.
But when it came down to miss Vincows home,
There wasn't enough to steal, and so...

The annihilation began!
and the death of a women, was soon to arrive!
The blood slappettered walls, and the curtains were stained;
and somehow the sexual tensions were raised.

Jab, Peirce, Puncture, Thurst!
The night stalker is here.
Jab, Peirce, Puncture, Thurst!
Beware, the night stalker is here!

He'd walk through the door,
and as he came near,
He'd look in your eyes,
and you'll shrivle in fear.
Then he'd stab you once more,
and you'd fall to the floor!
but it wasn't enough for him.

So the fornication began!
and a dead women was soon to be fucked!
milt on the couch dripping on to the floor,
If you're already dead you could still be a whore?

Jab, Peirce, Puncture, Thurst!
The night stalker is here.
Jab, Peirce, Puncture, Thurst!
Beware, the night stalker is here!

... Please don't be too negative ^^;;; thanks

Nice, I like it. :)

Really?? Yay!! Thank you ^^

HMM OK

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I liked the poem. You keep trying, because I think you got a talent going for it. The songlyric would probably fit in nicely to a band who had a sound like Bauhaus.

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Richard_Ram%C3%ADrez

Thank you ^^; hopefully I will get better someday...

Groan. Good work, DeathChii by the way.

Goth Forever

Thanks... the song would probably sound better if you kne the tune I had in my head for it xD;

"the ocean of pain"

I love the imagery. You underrate yourself as a writer. There's definitely potential here.

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Kolchak:_The_Night_Stalker

You forgot to tackily add "Good goth!" to the beginning of this.

Guess I did. You forgot to obnoxiously write IN GIGANTIC LETTERS. But thank you for pointing that out, it was much appreciated :)
Goth Forever

http://tbn0.google.com/images?q=tbn:...ASblue_04b.JPG

Google it.
Goth Forever

...WHAT THE HELL IS THAT?
That bunny scared the <insert random vulgarity> out of me. Consequently, it is now my new background..

I love love love loved your poem, Chii!
The first four lines about the Night Stalker sounds like something on a tombstone..and the entire thing reminds me of a twisted Disney song.

Thank you guys for the positive feedback ^^

Chii!!!
I loooooove you!
YAAAAAAY!

Hey, my letters aren't gigantic, your monitor's just small.

Wait...wouldn't a small monitor make the letters small?
And why is 'Goth Forever' bright yellow?

No, a smaller monitor has a smaller resolution.

You are an ass, extraordinary. Go die somewhere, preferably far away from here. I hate you.

See? It's simple. You can harass anyone on this board without any repercussions. Go die somewhere? Oh come on Tismine, you can think of something better than that.

Oh, goodness, of course I can. I have a headache, and was trying to keep my insults relatively tame. And I'm mad at him for a reason, not just because I feel like starting something.

You think I'm mean, Tismine? If only you had any idea how many times I've bitten my tongue while reading through this forum.

That was fairly polite of you then. Why am I supposed to care? Just because you've bitten your tongue sometimes does not mean that you haven't let it loose much more often.

You want to tell me what you think of me? Be my guest. You know I'll put you right in your place.

My place? What, exactly, is my place? No, honestly, I'm curious. I love how you assume you'll be able to put me there.

There's a big difference between what you are and what you think you are, thats how. I can't even be any more specific than that as of this post, because to tell you the truth, I can't even tell you from almost any other girl on this forum, so I think it's real interesting that you singled me out. I can only imagine which of your angsty trends I disrespected.

Hmm? Oh, you didn't disrespect me, not at all. In fact, I rather liked you.
What do I think I am? I'm not entirely sure as to what you are referring to.

Oh, you rather liked me. I guess that's why you're following me around telling me I'm an "ass." You're pissed off that I insulted one of your friends then, is that right?

...I haven't been following you around. You're greatly exaggerating. And you hit it in one. :)

Yep, must be my own paranoia.

Not sure what this is supposed to mean.

It means that's true. It's a golf cliche.

I thought it was "hole in one", but I guess I wouldn't know. Anything else you want?

It's a variation.
Yes, actually. I want you to go away, so Vyv will come back.

lol, I hope you aren't telling me somebody "quit" this forum because of something I said.

Why do you hope that?

You got me; I don't hope that, I don't even care.

But it's not because of the first page of this thread, right?

In part, yes.

Vyv left? =[

wow!!! i oved your poem chii!!! , it kicks my writing skills to hell, and by the way: extrodinary and tismine, why are you fighting? what exact pleasure is there in yelling abuse at someone who is probably thousands of kilometers away from you? i beleave that if you weren't both hiding behind the protection of a vast space between you, you would guard your tounges much more, but i guess thats just my opinoin..... loved your poem chii.

Thank you!! ^___^

hey, chi, how old are you?

out of curiosity

Indeed, Vyv has left the building!

*sorry to cut off other questions*

Just turned 16 3 days ago!

A happy belated birthday then!