A poetry try...
 

There, a try of a teenage girl to become a poet. You know what you can expect.

About time:
Ashes to ashes
Dust to dust
Light to darkness
Iron to rust
Cities lay in ruins
Empires fall
Great names will be forgotten by all


About love:
A rose that bleeds
A heart that needs
A little love
To stay above
All of the fears
To stop the tears
To make it feel
That something's real
That tomorrow's worth living
Something to be recieving
When all else is gone


Any advice?

Wow I like your love poem a lot. The beginning of the first one sounded quite familiar but, with a twist xD.

Awesome!

hey, i enjoyed them. I thought you were going to say a spell at first but you proved me wrong.

Your poems are just right. Sometimes short is good!

miserable crap.... u deserve to spend your days alone..

Wallow in despair.

I utterly love your poem about time. No other words can cover it.
I hope you don't mind me quoting it in my signature?

The first stanza isn't terrible, but there's nothing remarkable about it, and it reads like a child's playground rhyme.
The second stanza is 100% cliche and uninspired.

Remember, that's not necessarily a bad thing. Everyone starts somewhere.

Well, I have actually been pondering the time one all day, and I have a suggestion =) instead of "Great names" I would say "The greatest names"
But that may just be a question of preferances =)

They weren't horrible. The first ones beginning kind of turned me off from it, but the second wasn't bad.

I don't like rhyming poetry but for a rhyming poem I really liked it...you have some very beautiful imagery!!! especially the ruins, rust you should definitly try different kinds of poetry!

Oh... Not here often... I don't mind if you quote it as a signature. Sorry for not responding earlier.

I did actually do so for a short amount of time, but when my signature took up a lot of space that way, I changed it =)

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here is one I wrote
 

It was all over with just one THRUST wish is to well as burn is to hell ashes to ashes dust to dust so stab me in the heart if you must

Hahahahaha nice icon