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Gothic Doll
this is a cool poem
lost child , i see those eyes of deepest blue you are no more to those who once you loved so lost without a hand to guide you through your clothes tattered , your face encased in mud you were found ( drunk ) too young , you danced tip-toed with friends , all dressed in black , looking for some escape you shift , so softly , from shade to shadow believe not in karma , and not in fate your own innocence you've come to despise in that hard luckless woman you've become eden in lost in those deep blue doll's eyes passion sings sweet , but in you it's undone the walls behind those eyes are growing tall Deep-blue pleading for a soul to share all |
Dude, you're on fire. This one is even better than the last one! Kudos!
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Good lines, but
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I like it! You're really really good! Damn my inferior writing skills!
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hay welcome everybody and thank's for comment
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"those whom you once loved" would work. |
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