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Silent Bird
This space is cramped
There is no more room to grow This life is trapped With no where else to go I want to run away Leaving the past in the past But he is the reason I stay The reason I stay trapped My heart accepts the bruises His smile is worth more than my pain If I leave, one of us he looses And who am I to take that away? Selfishness, I'm so infected The guilt is tearing at the walls Just one more day, rejected Into the shadow's I crawl I'm lifeless, I'm broken I'm caged, Im hopeless Another day, Another sadness This bird is flightless, drowning in madness Sacrifices, sacrifices I'll do it for him Maybe it makes me a fool But I'll silence my sadness for him |
It has potential, but try free verse instead of rhyming, and use more symbolism.
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Well done! You might be able to refine this poem a bit, but it has a definite feeling and purpose running through it. I like the subject matter and the tone. Thank you for sharing it.
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