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Speak Easy
Speak Easy
I told her it was about a hundred years ago that we met. I swear we were the bees’ knees, roaring in the twenties, drinking up the places where they spoke easy, and we never cared about a word they said. Where nights were spent under the holler of quick music, quick feet and our slow jazzy love. We just were out of contact, for those decades— I told her, “Baby, I’m glad we’re back.” |
I like this, but it seems a little forced to me. The references to the Jazz Age, I mean.
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I have to admit, I think it's clever. I enjoyed it.
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'Here comes Al!' , they'd say. |
Well, the mafia sure got shit done. I find the prohibition was fascinating. Drinking booze made you sexier, and a criminal all at once. It was fantastic. We take booze for granted now, but it's freakin' amazing. I can't wait to get slammed like it's 1929.
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The black sheep of the family, a great-great-great uncle or something was shot and killed by the police when he was caught rum running during prohibition.
I think the competition bribed the cops to get rid of him. |
I like this poem. It's written in the spirit of the era. Mmm, slow jazzy love.
Although, technically, it was only 80 years ago, not a century. ;) |
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I'm unsure as to why so many people fantasize about living in the era of Prohibition. It just doesn't make sense. |
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Also, it's closer to 90 years ago...2007 and all. |
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Very strange time. Plus, it must have been quite hilarious to laugh in the face of the police like they did. |
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Super Sprite, this is meant as constructive criticism. Don't "date" your poem with specifics. Call it the last century, not about 100 years ago. Let's not argue historical accuracy when you captured the essence so well.
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That, and a hundred years implies a more significant visual than eighty. A hundred years is dusty and black and white, in between a daguerrotype and sepia toned photograph; between Victorian buttoned collars and Mucha's art deco.
Eighty years is a lifetime, a hundred years is forever |
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Also, a hundred years ago means they MET when they were probably 10 or so, and spent their time together during the roaring twenties. You should analyze a little closer. How many babies do you know were in SPEAK EASIES? Come on! They were at least 21 according to the narrator. "I told her it was about a hundred years ago that we met." |
Like it. Makes me want to wear fringe on the bottom of a short dress, and smoke a clove through a long holder, then try out my new dancin' shoes on the charleston.
It is the type of nostalgic storyline that makes people feel like they almost have those memories, just for a second. Glamour has its place, in even the roughest reality. |
One thing that was brought to my attention that I don't get. Is the narrator almost a hundred years old? Or is he just undying for some reason? Merely curious.
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As I said earlier...it takes a little thought to understand what this means. Two lovers met in a past life, they lived their life during the roaring twenties and had some great times drinking, dancing, and loving. They spent all their time together, and the times really DIDN'T matter, only their presence mattered as seen in these lines:
drinking up the places where they spoke easy, and we never cared about a word they said. Then they were out of contact for a few decades (aka died), then met again and the narrator is glad they are back together again. |
Reminds me of a old sign in one of our rehabbed dance halls here: "Please Charleston quietly"... You couldn't stop the energy of the era, but you could put up a front that you tried.
Also, the narrator did not name *when* he(?) was reciting, so the dates are irrelevant. But I do like the almost tactile gap between 100 years over 80. We all know someone aged 80, few of us know someone over a hundred- a hundred years seems ominious and lends a haunted, echo-y quality- somethign you see in photographs but which you cannot wholly relate. You can hear the band, and teh feet on the floor in a rapture of movement; and you can hear the phonograph, the saxophone over the cracks in the needle, over the spinning, the sad sound of a lone female voice singing "Careless Love" and someone sitting alone. |
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