Regurgitations
 

I am going to regurgitate

any excess flesh

I am going to masturbate

away all this mess

I am going to laze around

the ballroom of my room

I am going to smoke

my death

in this hazened gloom

I'm vain! I'm vain!

I hate myself

In the

end

we

always

melt

I have not written a poem in ages...thoughts?

Describes perfectly how I felt the summer before last. Not bad, but I'd refrain from using the many spaces and italics; makes it a little cheesy. Keep writing.

Definitely clever. You have potential.

I liked the above part.

Great narrative, I love how you perfectly wrote the 'ballroom/gloom' part very smoothley and the 'in the end we always melt', was creative as well.. I think you should keep writing.

Goth Forever

Why, thank you to everyone!

It amused me. I enjoyed it. There's nothing wrong with having a bit of humor in some poetry.

I like it. Keep writing!