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It has potential, and I like the erratic rhyme scheme, but some parts feel fake or unnecessary, and a couple of the rhymes seemed a little forced.
If you didn't want a critique, I apologize, and in the future I'll just give a general impression. Just let me know!
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A SPIDER sewed at night
Without a light
Upon an arc of white.
If ruff it was of dame
Or shroud of gnome,
Himself, himself inform.
Of immortality
His strategy
Was physiognomy.
--Emily Dickinson
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