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I like the codependence of ingestion imagery and religious imagery. and i think this line is particularly effective:
The rotten core of a bitter heart left on a burning sleeve,
because the 'rotten core' part made me think of apples and eden, and forbidden desires. and the heart/sleeve reflex worked as well. it suggests that there was a sense of openness to others that was violated for whatever reason.
If you haven't already, read through all the prophesies of the Bible. Check out William Blake's 'The Marriage of Heaven & Hell,' and the Hypostasis of the Archons, which is an old gnostic text you might find interesting. But you're dabbling in a special sort of poetry called prophesy, and the tradition of those prophets and their bizarre lifestyles.
Prophetic texts are often visual metaphors, and use the image as a metanym for some greater context. So when Hosea (a minor Hebrew prophet) marries a Canaanite girl from the whoredoms, fathers three unusually named children, and she eventually dumps him and he's stuck with them, it supposed to mirror God's relationship to unfaithful Israel.
What is frightening about these prophets, is that they take on the identity of a symbol, and often they themselves are analogies for God. So they never act in their own best interests, and their function in society is didactic. They teach lessons, literally, and their medium is not words exclusively like a poet or writer, but sometimes experience itself. They are satirists and cultural critics, they make comments on society as a whole that are destined to be rejected as negative bullshit. They are outcasts who act like madmen. They exist on the fringe of society, and look at people from the outside in, an act of condescension.
None of this is good or bad, it sort of just is. It's the stuff of the motifs you're working with. apocalypse, prophesy. think of code too.
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