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As a poem (which I assume this is, given the structure) it's painfully cliche-ridden. There are more original ways to say "I am the monster under your bed", ways that engage the reader more deeply. Moreover, the allusion to Genesis is unnecessary, and even deleterious, to the poem. When you make reference to one of the most well-known pieces of literature in human history, your piece must live up to it. This, I'm sorry to say, does not.
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