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Idea about how to write somthing better (sorry!) try 'showing' rather than 'telling' if you get my drift. for example, instead of the hypotetical sentence "He walked down the road'
try somthing like "the wind whiped through his hair as he plodded slowly past the abandoned shopfronts." see, you describe what is going on, rather than just saying it. Describe the placenta! Yay!
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