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Regret.
It's not half as good as some of the poems on this board, but I need someone to criticize it and tell me how to improve my poor writing skills. Therefore, any kind of comments would be appreciated.
Regretting your steps, you fall slowly.
Your incomplete thoughts fall into marvelous sky.
Waves of nothingness drawn you in despair
Yet you refuse to raise your voice.
Mortal sorrow makes your heart pound painfully,
Crashing the shatters of silence away.
Smell of mortal decay makes you run away from your shadow,
Forgetting every secret you had ever known.
You will run forever, disappearing slowly
Into the thundering darkness
Which waits, patiently,
In the depths of your soul.
The whole world
Caught in one miraculous reflection
Scenery painted on still water
The story of one thousand centuries
And one man to come
Is yours.
Choose again.
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