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Great stuff, as usual.
The young man......... younger man, perhaps? Middle-aged man? Man? If anything, I'd strike teeager and keep young man, which would cover the phases of life more fully. Anyhow, I'd go for GM's advice of some description of the beach, though personally I'd keep it limited to an extra word or two to highlight the bareness of the beach for the others.
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