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Yeah, you answered it. I had a suspicion I wanted to confirm.
The problem I'm seeing with this poem is that I don't find much depth to it, it's all surface. Because you're talking about a generic lost child, your poem is dealing with a very broad Archetype and therefore makes the descent into clich'e very quickly.
If you were to rewrite this, I'd recommend you write about a specific isolated child that you know of personally. Or if you want to write about the isolated children of the world you need to talk about them from your point of view.
Writing, like all art, is a process of self-discovery. A poem should be a way of showing us the world the way you experience it. Be open, and honest, and above all give us the poem you have, not the poem you think we want to hear. Otherwise it's just going to be a cardboard cutout.
Anyway, you obviously enjoy writing, so keep it up. The stuff you've got is a good start.
How old are you anyway?
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