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Old 10-02-2008, 10:40 AM   #6
Noirette
 
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The first is the original one. I felt like I needed to write some solution to that situation, and the second and third stanzas are the solution.
I have another idea for the first stanza. Maybe it will be better. I still want the problem-solution form. though.

It can sound better with "If I only had the courage". I will work on this.
Thank you
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