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Old 12-03-2008, 07:51 PM   #10
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Quote:
Originally Posted by Dragoness2071
"See my love, I cannot tell
Screaming what my hear begins to yell
I'll break my promise, set me free
Bring my love/Back to me
Here I am/The tower that fell
See my love/I cannot tell
Release my spirit/Set me free
Bring my love/Back to me."

Short and sweet, I know. But critique is much appreciated. :]
"Bring my love , my love
, back to me ."

Sorry , I was reading it and adding this all the time ...
Not bad at all . Kind of like it .
Or ...

"bring the love , my love
, back to me ."
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