What stuck out to me the most was the misuse of "it's" when you should have been using "its."
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and help cry out it's melodic fears
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I think those are the only two. I read the poem earlier and just skimmed back over it briefly to make a point at 4:30 am.
Aside from that, I think it's an interesting poem. I suck at writing poetry. Imagery is not becoming of me.
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"Don't ever let anybody teach you to think, Lance: it is the curse of the world." - King Arthur in T.H. White's The Once And Future King
"Do not judge, or you too will be judged. For in the same way you judge others, you will be judged and with the measure you use, it will be measured to you" The Bible (Matthew 7:12)
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