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These lyrics are too long. You end up repeating the same point a lot, just in slightly different phrases. When you've got something that you want to say, you don't need to keep finding different ways to describe it, take Discharge as an example. The first two verses would be MORE than enough. There are problems there anyway, I think you need to go through it and cut out the cheesy parts, because some do reek of preachiness or just come off as a bit childish, either through clumsy phrasing or sentiment.
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