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I'm glad the majority of you liked it. As for what Desp mentioned, that part could be changed. I could attempt to have a less romantic approach to describing what I was seeing outside.
As for not saying anything, I wasn't exactly saying much. It was a poem about people watching, which I tend to do a lot and I made a statement about what I saw.
Looking back, there is no conflict or resolution in this poem, so it lacks any real profound idea. I'm okay with this.
My latest poem was about drinking espresso. It too was mostly my own thoughts during a moment of drinking the stuff.
Anyway, I'm glad that most of you liked it. Beyond being just a poem about people watching, I feel it was a decent excersize in working on removing lofty emotions from my writing, which generally causes me to sound like some fyeg.
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