Underwear: You mean this?
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Originally Posted by gothicusmaximus
These lines are the only ones that might almost trick someone into believing he or she was reading a poem. The rest of it is unmistakably shitty Cruxshadows lyrics.
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I think he's being a bit harsh and more than a little flippant. The above isn't really all that reminiscent of Rogue's wording. I think he just knows Kontan likes Cruxshadows, and assumed he was trying to ape their style.
Kontan: You really need to work on sperating this into proper stanzas. When you lump it all together like this it makes the poem look ugly and amateurish. You're wise not to worry about confllct, resolution, or making any sort of statement. It's a poem, not a novella or manifesto. Simple observations are fne, and in my opinion usually work better for this kind of thing.
Just remember to shy away from Cliche' and melodrama and you'll be fine.