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Old 10-07-2009, 06:24 AM   #6
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Originally Posted by sibyl vane. View Post
It needs to be more economical. You spell it out for the reader too much imo.

i totally disagree ,i think it's good .
There is no need to change anything.
It's perfect as it's.
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