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Old 05-31-2010, 08:12 AM   #4
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Originally Posted by Underwater Ophelia View Post
That is childish, but it's good. The mood you've created is excellent. I'm not kidding when I say this--reading this reminded me of being a child when my mom would be all drunk and cracked out.

Fix this, and make the rhythm match the serious of the tone.
Jesus UO, just damn.


I liked it MissC. Do you post poems often?
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