[Apathy's_Child]

I kind of like this. It's a little rough, but form and rhythm comes easily with a little practice and knowledge. The hardest thing for a lot of people is capturing a mood without being too explicit - the whole show-don't-tell classic - and you pull that off well IMO.

I also agree with your approach - understated is way better than overblown, especially when you're either starting out or starting up again. I'd be interested to read more, if you keep writing.