Thread: New Beginning
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Old 07-22-2010, 08:44 AM   #2
TheFeatheredÆtheling
 
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I like this poem's elegant description death, but there is some subtle language that is unsettling. Did you mean to write that your spirit "descends" from this world rather than ascends? Your poem is called "New Beginning", and you concluded it with "But now I am lost". It almost sounds as if this poem is about damnation.
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