Thread: Rhyme?
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Old 10-13-2010, 05:07 AM   #2
Isaloween
 
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Firstly, hello to you.

My thoughts: I'm not a native English speaker so I might be totaly wrong, but I think there is a problem in the sentences construction. It seems to change style in a... how to tell you... anarchistic manner...
That made it a bit difficult to read to me... But I repeat, I'm not too sure of myself here, maybe that was wanted?... keep going.
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