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Angelic, thanks for the complement. Your suggestions are interesting, but death is a serious topic to me so I'll leave such quirky ideas for someone else to write.
Murder of Crows, thanks to you as well.
Kontan, your "death metal prayer" comment amuses me greatly. It wasn't my intention, but I can see how you'd make that comparison. However, the nuances here are undoubtedly the best thing about this poem (and there are many of them). Without mentioning "God", "angels", "Heaven", or "Hell" directly, the poem's meaning is clear. Capitalising "One" is a sign of respect as well a tradition, but "The.." in "The One..." is capitalised solely because it begins the line; after all, this isn't The Matrix.
Sir Canvas, I'm glad that you liked the first stanza. I actually preferred the latter half. Anyway, I revised this once recently before posting it here, but it still has inadequacies. Honestly, it's a rather difficult structure to write. Thanks for the input.
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