[Apathy's_Child]

Originally Posted by CuckooTuli

I have to disagree, actually... I really dislike the subject matter. It's just very... obvious. I don't know how much exploration it really warrants, but that's a different argument really, and this didn't do it for me. I know there's the "everything has been done to death" argument to be had about my saying that, but I found the subject matter too familiar, and agree with Underwater Ophelia's comment about it being too chatty. I thought it was very overly wordy in a way that bogged it down.

For what it's worth though, I've nosed around in this section a bit, and I do like some of your other poems.

Actually, I think I agree with pretty much every word of this. Also agree with Kontan's comment about your specific use of the word atheist, although I think you could get around that pretty easily with a little re-wording.