I'm not a huge fan of how the poem is laid out, it looks like a really strange paragraph (which I'm assuming was your intention, some people will probably love it but it just isn't really my cup of tea). As always you seem to take great care picking just the right wording. So essentially I like the poem but I don't really like looking at it.
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-Carbon Leaf
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