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Old 06-09-2004, 05:26 PM   #9
demon_warrior
 
Join Date: Apr 2004
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Originally Posted by black_fairy
Mmmm... Maybe the idea is good, but I find that story a little... strange.

I think it's confusing, I'd like the explanations more detailed in some places.

The story isn't very much structured (beginning, unrolling and end, I don't know if you understand me..), if you are starting to write, this is a very important thing.

I suppose it's a fantasy story, but I find it has too coincidences...

I hope I haven't been too hard...... :oops:
You have not at all been too hard. I appreciate your trying to be polite about it but as I said before, I appreciate any and all opinions.

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