Noxious

Isaloween · 10-13-2010, 06:16 AM

Cautious,
Cause you hate to hear it,
But I'll predict your words.
Noxious,
Cause I can't convey it,
But I'll exhaust your world.
You're no good to me.
I'm no good to you.
But still, we laugh,
At the worst of days,
Because nothing matters,
When, lost and delirious,
Our poles become neutral and dazed.
You fluctuate from black to white.
And my liking equals my fright.
As your temper and your deceit,
Forces joy into my heart.
You're all I had to all I want,
That never prooved beneficial.
You look like a trap
You feel like a fall
And I wont let you
Break my soul.

Sir Canvas Corpsey · 10-13-2010, 07:22 AM

It's a trap!? :O

Aside from 'break my soul' as the final line, I enjoyed reading it, because I totally get that French Pop vibe from it.

Isaloween · 10-13-2010, 07:34 AM

Thanks for the comment, but "French Pop vibe "?
Not too sure what that could feel like actualy...

Sir Canvas Corpsey · 10-13-2010, 07:35 AM

Britney Spears with a croissant.

Isaloween · 10-13-2010, 07:37 AM

Oh jesus fucking christ! that's about the worst insult ever LOL! But just for that one I'll thank you!

vindicatedxjin · 10-13-2010, 08:39 AM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Sir Canvas Corpsey

Britney Spears with a croissant.

Bahahahahaha!

magnus13 · 10-13-2010, 10:37 AM

A little too chaotic for me this time, kinda hard to read. sorry, obviously some emotion tide up in that one.

Versus · 10-13-2010, 07:23 PM

I really liked it. It reminds me of a feeling I get when I'm in a relationship with a person that I know is bad for me, but at the same can't stop myself from being drawn to. More please.

Sinjob · 10-13-2010, 07:29 PM

Quote:

A little too chaotic for me this time, kinda hard to read.

Remarked the author of:

Quote:

there is a wall in a dim dry land
that was raised up by no mortal hand

beyond that place no bird will fly
no children laugh, no lovers sigh

none there worries on what might be
the end is always the same you see

no man there feels hunger or thirst
all sins forgiven, even the worst

no one wants or has any need
all debts forgiven, all slaves freed

and beyond that land beyond the wall
there stands vast a black mountain tall

beyond the land where all are the same
there rises a mountain whose name is pain

and many would climb it to be free
of deaths perfect, sterile equality

Talk about hard to read.

I'd say these poems are on the same page.

Isaloween · 10-14-2010, 05:33 AM

Thanks for your comments everyone...

Chaotic is the kind of state of mind I was into when I wrote it, so I guess the definition fits!