1:36am

[HeartagramLove8]

I think of you. I think of you all night. Its 1:36AM right now, I am still thinking of you. I lay here crying, still thinking of you. still millions upon millions of thoughts of you run throughout my head. If I let it explode, you'll know about my true feelings. But, hey, You're reading this right now, so you obviously already know. You probably know that is still 1:36AM. I ran for a thousand miles, cried until i bled, wrote till it hurt, and its still 1:36AM and I'm still loving you. Its still, time has stopped. Time does not stop for a nobody, but you're someone. But you left me, and now its 1:37AM





~Heartagram~

its not divided up because its more of a suicide note format.

i suck i know, but i feel like my ideas are pretty good so any tips? or just plain feedback.

so to be fair u should no the reason behind this, i had loved this girl after one night of knowing her we spent at least 20 hours straight holding hands and non stop talking. and at exactly 1:36AM i asked her to be my girlfriend and she said hell ya! but who likes a poem with a happy ending?

[Underwater Ophelia]

The idea being this is really neat.

The execution is piss-poor, though, so work on turning into a poem and give it structure.
I understand you want it to be like a "suicide note," but that isn't going to work, and if you give up on that idea, this poem could be very good, I think.

[Underwater Ophelia]

Also if you cut out the cliches and use more original and poignant imagery.

[JCC]

I hated absolutely everything about it, but there you go eh, I guess Ophie is more of an optimist.