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Passions of the Past
I'm really not a writer. I haven't really tried to write since high school. Whatever.
and so it turns you on and red shines in the dark but when it's done it's never gone and your still laying fully stark did you know that before and you went ahead anyway is it for the face you adored that you led yourself astray Why can't you leave it be it's a love you will never have pride used as emotional debris and your heart is cut in half Cast your bitter pall on hope as you blacken out the day Blind and broken, still you grope in time the black turns gray. but still the red shines in the dark memories still turn you on the truth laid out fully stark and now he's forever gone ...and there you have it. Now what I want from you is, do you think I have any talent that just needs to be cultivated, or should I just quit while I'm ahead? |
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Although I would have liked the question mark used where it was needed and some other grammar, I liked it and I think you have captured and expressed a mood very well. :) I especially liked the last two stanzas.
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I'm not looking at it as a career. It's just something I'd like to know if I were any good at. |
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