Requesting Constructive Criticism

[Solumina]

I count 11 and yeah meter requires more than just the number of syllables, you have to have the proper rhythm, be it iambs, dactyls, spondees, or whatever your particular meter requires, iambic pentameter is all iambs.

[voodoowitchdr]

Originally Posted by voodoowitchdr

I set out to cross the rivers of fire,

You can't tell me that's 14, I count ten.

I sorry if i sound cranky, but i've mostly been getting feed back that tells me to quit writing all together. I want to argue till I'm either vanquished or I win. and i know that I make a lot of errors, it's because I don't proof read myself.

[Solumina]

Originally Posted by Pyre

No, that's Ophelia's job, and she's damn proud of it. You're too much of a pushover to be that mean <3

I am kidding, but I think you are too soft on them :P

I know I was being sarcastic as they decided that I was picking on them for pointing out that their post was completely unnecessary.

[voodoowitchdr]

I keep forgetting that i changed a lot of wording after I expanded. Some lines with 11 are actually supposed to be spoke with ten. Like fiery can be spoken with three or two. I also changed a lot of words durring revision which blew the iams out the window.

[isobel black]

Ah come on man, it's just a song, fuck meter. I was just being pretentious anyway. Just admit you didn't pay attention to it. I don't buy that the first line went from iambic to almost completely trochaic just by rephrasing.