You sound interesting, so for your sake I will point out some of the errors in your post for you.
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Originally Posted by Daemonne
I've joined the community because I want to get in touch with more goths (again- not necessery to put that in there). and also improve my English by talking about interesting things.
(If you see mistakes, pls tell me.)
Not like in school where you're just talking about (the topics in the book- for this part I would choose a different way to word it like maybe- topics from textbooks).
I wouldn't say that I'm a 100%-goth. When I was 14 I started to listen to Metal and I had a kind of (a) metamorphose - I would say I was (depressive- you used an adjective form where as the past tense form-depressed- would work better) (and- if you're listing somthing off use commas instead of -and- all the time, save -and- for the last listed off thing because it gets irritating to hear -and- all the time) the music and also the new "black" lifestyle helped me a lot.(sentence was getting too long I would cut the people part into it's own sentence ) also the people I got to know. Time passed and I discovered more and more music - Black Metal, Gothic, Classic, Industrial and so on. So now I'm a mix, but more of a goth than anything else.
I love reading - nearly all sorts of books. I love John Irving. (He writes gorgeous- gorgeous is an adjective used to describe the appearance of somthing a better word would be somthing like amazing like for example-His writting is amazing)! I also like Fantasy, History Books and so on... The great exception are Crime books - I really don't like them.
(Greets- is a verb form which you would use in a sentence like-he greets the guests- and is unnecessery at the end of an introduction, everything at the end before this sums it up quite nicely so somthing after is not necessery)
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Those things were all quite minor and in general it's not hard to understand what you were saying, but the sentences didn't flow very well so I made those corrections. I have little doubt that if you were in a english speaking country and spoke like that people would easily be able to understand you. Welcome
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