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10-09-2007, 04:03 PM
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Soggy Bread.
there's a cold on my skin and it's
I..
it's sort of slimy, I think
a cold
a wet kind of cold
permeating
me turning me into soggy bread
break apart slowlike
there's a cold in my throat
it's this kind of salty
gritty cold
I can't fight against
the slime was almost soothing--oh well
soggybreadbreakapart
sticks to your hands
don't let it get in your hair
or you'll decompose
too.
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10-09-2007, 04:44 PM
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That was profound. It moved me.
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10-09-2007, 04:46 PM
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If you're being sincere, thank you very much, and I'd really like to hear why.
If you're not being sincere, ok then.
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10-09-2007, 04:49 PM
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Well I did actually like it.
I just assumed there was supposed to be a bit of humor in there too.
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10-09-2007, 04:49 PM
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You two bicker a lot...
Nice poem UO. What's the inspiration if you don't mind my asking?
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10-09-2007, 04:54 PM
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I didn't know we were bickering at the moment.
In other news, it was inspired by drowning. Er...not my drowning, but the thought of drowning. And a few other things, but those belong to me.
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10-09-2007, 04:54 PM
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Originally Posted by kwaniesiam
You two bicker a lot...
Nice poem UO. What's the inspiration if you don't mind my asking?
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OK? How was this bickering?
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10-09-2007, 06:55 PM
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An interesting comment from my beau on this:
I felt like I just climbed out of a pool in clothes that should NEVER be wet, but the clothes were my feelings.
Anyone else get this feeling? I thought it was really interesting.
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10-10-2007, 06:10 AM
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Join Date: Sep 2007
Location: in my own lil fantasys involving vampires! naahh i live in vermont..unfortunatly.
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i know exacly what you mean that you said it..but i didnt think of that at first.
i like it though!
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10-10-2007, 07:51 AM
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Join Date: Sep 2007
Location: A Random Abyss
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Nice Poem. I think the drowning theme is interesting.
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10-10-2007, 07:17 PM
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Join Date: Aug 2007
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Originally Posted by Graveyard.Crow
OK? How was this bickering?
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I never said this was, I meant in general. Just an observation. Sorry?
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10-11-2007, 01:17 PM
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That was interesting Underwater Ophelia!
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10-12-2007, 09:48 AM
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Thank you very much.
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