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Old 12-04-2006, 02:20 AM   #1
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Question The dream canopy

I've been writing alot, and posting very little. I'll make it up, and advice would be really great.



Steeples arise from blithened earth
And give to rotting demons, birth

Decay will flourish in dystopia skies
And from dead minds arise, arise!

We build us a cold steel industrial hell
Where forges for warfare levianthans dwell

Starbound metropolises hang in the black
A silent container for humanity’s wreck

There statues of materialistic glory shall wink
For the modern man spends his whole life, does not think

Humans are plucked from a vast plastic womb
And grown in our poisenous oxygen tomb

Computer’s will think and will have much to say
How much will they laugh at the end of our days

For minds of the future will have no desire
They will simply be untill cast in the fire

And earth she is bleeding yet softly she smiles
For fast she will heal at the end of our trials

She might be our cradle, and maybe our coffin
But she will be green when we will be... nothing.


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Recognition, reformulation, reproduction of information
A maze of mirrors in myriad colors
Fade and shift from real, world upon world renew
Mid-mental, instrumental contemplations
Meme counterparts with no original
Mind reflect mind, deflect, reflect
Upon endless self-bestowed limitations

Electricitity, internal cranial activity
Such luminous sensitivity

With in complexity, creativity


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A presence, a soft beating under the floor
Familiarity, unsettling serenity
Within, waits hidden animosity

On the peeling gray wall, drawing itself
In morbid lines, a picture of a bleeding brain

A breathing shadow on the floor
Casting it’s dead eyes in my directing
Project it’s gloom on me

In the mirror, my seeing holes pour red
Yet in truth, I feel them, there

Hushed wishpers from beyond the grave
Coil around me, in frigid embrace

Patterns in the paper, curl in gloomy lips
Speak in written tones
Of death, they give a glimpse:
“depths of winter are your coil my love”

In the cloudy plaster of my ceiling
Her features greet me
Subtle recognition

The paintings twist in their frames
With her depection
Going up in wounded flames
Eyes roll peculiarly
All through the night

The wood cracks in her rhythm
Her faded life forces itself into my ears

The fireplace is the tongue of hell
Inside, her scorched lungs blow

Silver winds in awkward knots
And in blistering bubbles, rots

I stab her walls, I cut her eyes
The walls bleed black

Inside I hear her cursing voice:
“My damned heart, infects you”

I shoot, I kill the rotting walls
Yet I hear her horrid call

I run the staircase down, far down
Its splintered skin curls, encloses me

The building’s brewing bile
Beckons with a repulsive smile

The scent of her melting
The sounds of her suffering in so many
Beautiful wild colors, dancing

At last below in the dank confinements
I find her skeletal form
The incinerator vomits crimson foam

All the rest of her
The walls...
They drank it all
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Old 12-04-2006, 03:31 PM   #2
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Wow. I must say, you are quite the talented poet. I found these very enjoyable to read!
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Old 12-08-2006, 02:08 AM   #3
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Can anyone please tell me how to delete my poetry out of tris thread? I cannot find a bloody edit button.
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Old 12-08-2006, 04:54 AM   #4
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A rhyme is the last vowel sound in a word until the end, says and day does not work, nor does coffin/nothing, or wreck/black.
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Old 12-08-2006, 05:51 AM   #5
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I rarely rhyme, when I do, I still don't care much for strict rules. It's the idea and atmosphere I spend my time on.
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Old 12-08-2006, 01:23 PM   #6
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Can anyone please tell me how to delete my poetry out of tris thread? I cannot find a bloody edit button.
Why would you want to delete your poetry? You're one of the best poets we have. Also, you're one of only a few that I actually enjoy reading. Keep posting please.

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I rarely rhyme, when I do, I still don't care much for strict rules. It's the idea and atmosphere I spend my time on.
I strongly agree, the rhyming isn't the most important thing, it's the message you are trying to give.
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Old 12-08-2006, 03:26 PM   #7
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Thank you.

Well, I don't need to delete it right away, but I do intend on getting my work published in time. If I can't get it off this site nobody will publish it... thats why I don't post much else even if I have plenty to share.

I have a better idea.

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