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01-11-2009, 01:31 PM
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Join Date: Aug 2007
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Originally Posted by All Shall Be Judged
However, be advised that the Judge does not share power - you are welcome to sit at My right hand as I educate the cretinous boneheads who surround me,
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Trust me, darlin' - you manage THAT, I'll sit at your feet. And kowtow.
Ophie - re: the poem, my reaction pretty much mirrors Kontan's. It's old, and while you're one of the few people on here who've written poems I actually like, it's been some time since I've been able to get interested in your stuff.
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Witches have no wit, said the magician who was weak.
Hula, hula, said the witches. - Norman Mailer
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08-23-2009, 09:04 PM
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Join Date: Aug 2009
Location: a small unknown town in West Virginia, US
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i like this
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08-24-2009, 06:56 PM
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Join Date: Jan 2006
Location: Earth.
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Thanks.
I like it, too.
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08-26-2009, 01:33 AM
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Join Date: Sep 2007
Location: Thou Viking capital Denmark.
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Ophie(can I call you Ophie?), no offense in any way is intended in my following post, and should you still manage to take offense, I apolagize in advance:
You have a lot of potential, you have the power of the word in a way I rarely ever see anymore. Moreso than I could ever dream of. I am no good at poetry myself as I have no life experiance to back it up at all.
However, this was rather dull. I saw it more as a flow of thoughts and words rather than actual poetry. It needs more focus.
Also, as Kons said, a new subject would be in order.
I liked parts of it, but I think you overdid your metaphors a bit.
All in all, I would give this 2½/5
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08-26-2009, 07:32 AM
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Join Date: Jan 2006
Location: Earth.
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Originally Posted by Anarasha
Ophie(can I call you Ophie?), no offense in any way is intended in my following post, and should you still manage to take offense, I apolagize in advance:
You have a lot of potential, you have the power of the word in a way I rarely ever see anymore. Moreso than I could ever dream of. I am no good at poetry myself as I have no life experiance to back it up at all.
However, this was rather dull. I saw it more as a flow of thoughts and words rather than actual poetry. It needs more focus.
Also, as Kons said, a new subject would be in order.
I liked parts of it, but I think you overdid your metaphors a bit.
All in all, I would give this 2½/5
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Thank you for your comments.
Also, I don't care if anyone calls me Ophie.
It's used by various people here as both a term of endearment and in a condescending way, so it's not like it's an exclusive little nickname.
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