hi, i´m new...

[nevi_geek_gothic_social]

and to start, i want to share a poem i wrote with you. it´s in spanish, but......whatever:

La verdad

Sin respirar, ojos ardiendo
Frustración sin cesar, el alma cayendo
No hallo la forma de poderlo manifestar,
Me encierro en mis brazos, un refugio de los demas,
Pero no lo puedo evitar y rompo a llorar,
Por que todo es tan cruel, no me puedo defender,
No tengo el valor de poderme revelar,
Solo espero su humillo y gritar,
Me siento abatido, nada me reanima,
Ni siquiera mis amigos pueden alegrar el dia,
Desesperado pienso mi vida acabar,
Pero en uno u otro intento se que voy a fracasar,
Cuando soy quien soy, me evitan mañana y hoy,
Cuando soy alguien mas, por obra de ellos, me sale mal,
La escuela es mi tormento, todos se fijan en mis defectos,
No conformes con eso, me molesten hasta su satisfecho,
No tienen que ser insultos o burlas,
Sino ignorarme o degradarme, oh, malditas bestias con gula
De mi desesperación,
Cuando no puedo tomar acción.
Pero ni siquiera esto,
Sea poema o canción,
Va a aliviar mi frustración.
Casi siempre me digo,
Que no les voy a hacer caso,
Pero por mi maldito destino,
Esta promesa termino,
Que va, todo resulto un fracaso,
Desde niño ha empezado,
Traumantemente me han alterado,
Mi forma de ver, de sentir
Y otras que no he explicado,
Pienso que soy niño malo,
Y por eso amigos no he ganado,
Pero cuando me hacen a un lado,
Me arrepiento de haberlo intentado,
Me dijeron que naci genio,
Pero no usé esta virtud,
Y veo otros sacando 10,
Y que su vida han equilibrado
Esto me frustra mas,
Ya no puedo mas,
No me dejan en paz,
Yo quiero ser normal,
Lo deseo mas que algo, que alguien,
El no ser inadaptado,
Y por fin ser aceptado,
Ese es mi sueño anelhado,
Pero ellos no me quieren,
Humillándome se divierten,
Yo les pido que paren,
Pero ellos no advierten,
Que a pesar de mis intentos,
Y no ser un infeliz,
Soy todo un fracaso.

Dejame ya que he terminado,
No necesitas burlarte,
Por que aquí ya no habré estado,
Y por mas que me grites, insultes y humilles,
Mi vida habrá terminado.

Al fin…….

José Alberto González Murillo
15 años. 17/05/06


i hope you liked it.

[nevi_geek_gothic_social]

oh, sorry. i should have posted this in literature section. anyway, my life really sucks. i can´t remember antrhing good from where i live

[Godslayer Jillian]

Oh, a spanish poem
By the way, you should go to introduce yourself in the Introductions forum and this should be moved to the Poetry thread.
You made two mistakes, but, I actually enjoyed his introduction.

[Godslayer Jillian]

To all those that do not speak spanish:

The poem was a little angsty; basically his life in school and out of it. But I can see he is quite smart. The poem rhymed, and more than a superficial poem, it's more of a contemporary poem.

But, Nevi, I reccomend you, don't try to be normal. Be a freak, just like me

[nevi_geek_gothic_social]

Originally Posted by Xnguela

Hey, sweetie! Since you're new and I'm in a good mood, I'm going to be nice, k? This is me being nice:

1.) https://www.gothic.net/boards/forumdisplay.php?f=17
This is where this thread is supposed to go. It's for introductions.

2.) https://www.gothic.net/boards/showth...135#post144135
This is for poems.

3.) Do not be stupid and post your WHOLE ENTIRE NAME online. That is fucking dangerous, and since your profile says you're a minor, it's also illegal.

Lastly, I think I'd be able to say more about your poem if you were willing to offer a translation?

well it´s not my name, and my age. i used another ones. lucky me

[Sobeh]

I actually quite like the poem, though I'm sure I'm not garnering all that I might with true fluency. I wanted to contend the part that says

Pero ni siquiera esto,
Sea poema o canción,
Va a aliviar mi frustración.

But not even this,
Neither poem or song,
Is going to alleviate my frustration.

It's exactly this process of creation which makes the frustrations you talk about elsewhere in the poem mean so much less, because creative acts like this are perfect willful acts, ones that are so heavy with meaningfulness, a meaningfulness created by you.

Outsourcing meaning to others is the beginning of frustration. Only in taking back responsibility for meaning in your life is that frustration going to dissipate.

Or so I believe.

Thank you for the poem.

[Virulent Dryad]

Originally Posted by Xnguela

3.) Do not be stupid and post your WHOLE ENTIRE NAME online. That is fucking dangerous, and since your profile says you're a minor, it's also illegal.

That's illegal?

[Malady]

Hmm. . .well I like the fact that you used a poem as your introduction, even if it WAS put in the wrong section, but could you write a translation? I only speak fragmented barely passable spanish, and cannot understand the poem. . .(plus, I'm lazy)

[Magpie_Tendencies]

Malady, sweetie? This is an old thread that wasn't very good the first time around. The person who posted it originally hasn't returned since then.

It's probably best just to let it die...

[happy_dude]

Remember: If the thread is old Bind your hands and don't look back

[gothicchk660]

So What About Those Of Us Who Can't Speak Spanish??!!

Translation Please!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

[spookypurple]

Originally Posted by happy_dude

Remember: If the thread is old Bind your hands and don't look back

........

[Godslayer Jillian]

Originally Posted by gothicchk660

So What About Those Of Us Who Can't Speak Spanish??!!

Translation Please!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

M'dear, if you can't read it, don't bother about it. Besides, the guy only made 3 posts a months ago. Let it go.

[Immortal_Death]

I wish I hadn't learn Chinese, if i didnt, I would learn Spanish and understand my Mexican friends and this poem...