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09-24-2009, 12:20 AM
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Location: Sheffield UK.
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Crappy lyrics. Criticise!!!
They've got riot shields and their numbers blacked out.
Yeah, you know who we're talkin about.
Violent Sadist bastards who are in it for the fun.
State hired thugs with a badge and a gun.
SS-police-force, they wanna break your bones.
SS-police-force, they get you on your way home.
You ain't done nothing but you're still a target.
3 little piggies see you going to the market.
Shove you to the ground and kick you in the head.
Just buying carrots and the next minute dead.
SS-police-force, 4th reich wannabes.
SS-police-force, protected by politics.
SS-police-force, we don't even want them.
SS-police-force, that's why we hate them.
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09-24-2009, 12:22 AM
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Join Date: Apr 2009
Location: Sheffield UK.
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It's meant to be sung fast, kinda like Steve ignorant sang.
I don't really like it that much, but constructive criticism would be appreciated.
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09-24-2009, 12:25 AM
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Join Date: Sep 2009
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Well, it's not a masterpiece of magnificent proportions. However, I get a feeling it isn't meant to be. It sounds really punk and punk is raw, gritty and to the point. I think you've pretty much achieved that, wether you think it's any good or not.
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09-24-2009, 12:26 AM
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Join Date: Apr 2009
Location: Sheffield UK.
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Oh, it's meant to be about Ian Tomlinson, forgot to mention that. Might make bit more sense now. And yeah, it's meant to be punk.
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09-24-2009, 12:31 AM
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Join Date: Sep 2009
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It reminds me of the lyrics my dad used to write when he was in a shanty punk band back in the 80s (obviously, I wasn't there but he showed me their demo tapes) so I think I like them because it's kind of nostalgic to me, in a sense.
Those lyrics are good, they've got the essence of the movement down well, I reckon.
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09-24-2009, 06:01 AM
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Location: Minnesota, USA
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I like them Jack! It would sound better growled, but that's just my opinion. Look at it this way, my lyrics are all about Nuclear Winter/Nuclear Holocaust and Humanity dying after, you guessed it, a nuclear war!
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09-24-2009, 09:27 AM
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Quote:
Originally Posted by Still Jack
SS-police-force, we don't even want them.
SS-police-force, that's why we hate them.
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Until this, I could imagine it being sung (or shouted anyway). Take that as you will, though I think it means it doesn't fit as well as the rest of it.
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09-24-2009, 09:55 AM
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Join Date: Apr 2009
Location: Sheffield UK.
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I know it doesn't fit, I just couldn't think of something appropriate at the time.
Thanks everyone for the comments.
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09-24-2009, 11:05 AM
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Join Date: May 2007
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I liked the rest.
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09-24-2009, 11:35 AM
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Join Date: Dec 2007
Location: In the Desert
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Oh... it's ugly... blunt, to the point. Oh... but... the chorus would sound great... it has potential to bring life to the dying punk beast.
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09-24-2009, 12:16 PM
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Join Date: Apr 2009
Location: Sheffield UK.
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I changed the last 2 lines
SS-police-force, they smell like rancid bacon.
SS-police-force, we really fucking hate them.
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09-24-2009, 01:23 PM
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Join Date: Aug 2009
Location: The Most Goth Place In Texas...
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SS-police-force, 4th reich wannabes.
SS-police-force, protected by politics.
I'd like to hear how this turns out.
I always find words change whenever I play songs over and over.
To the Point is good, but you already knew that.
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