Lyrics/Feedback

[Zakyath]

I'm pretty new on songwriting, and would like some feedback on this latest text of mine

Bring it on, I can take critics, but keep it constructive, if you have to say just how much I suck or any like, do the world a favour and keep it to yourself.

Moonlight blinds these tearful eyes once more
As all these flowers die, the feeling decides to do the same
Once more, divided we fall
As my heart ache, as you throw it away once more

Is there a way to forsake
All this love marred by hate?

Blood running from my hands
Perfect ink for love letters
Seems to me at now
The perfect way to say good bye
Blood running from my hands
Perfect ink for love letters
Seems to me at now
The perfect way to say good bye

As time slips by, as I cry when the only thing to do is to say good bye
When knowing that what we ever had is to die
Look deep into the mirror, try to find yourself in the cold glass
Then turn around, look into my eyes, what you see is what you lost

Is there a way to forsake
All this love marred by hate?

Blood running from my hands
Perfect ink for love letters
Seems to me at now
The perfect way to say good bye
Blood running from my hands
Perfect ink for love letters
Seems to me at now
The perfect way to say good bye

[Aaroneet]

I thought that was rather good. You have a knack for song writing.

[Circle V]

The subject matter isn't very interesting, but it is a good composition. The music will determine its merit.

[Zakyath]

Thanks for the comments, this is one of my lesser good writings, but it's my latest and I'm trying to improve it but I feel kinda empty at the moment so it's going slow, way too slow

[Aaroneet]

Try to find a source of inspiration. Observe your surroundings, if that helps.