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Old 12-02-2008, 01:56 PM   #1
Eclipsing the Son
 
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A product of Automatic Writing

I walk down these streets every day
empty wallet empty palms
stretched out towards the nothing
that rises above
my drunken eyes
to see nothing that I haven't dreamed of

Can't even hope or think
that anything's going to REALLY happen

Don't even cast a line towards
a friendship that I won't call a dead fish
No More Girl
To inject like a heroine
into the vein of a vain life

No More God
To answer a prayer that
There was hope for a wife

Be my savior
Wash away my sins
I want a fresh start
So I can do it all over again

I just sink into a gutter and
curl up on my own affections
that someone years ago said
might mean something worth while

can I get a Hellelujah?
Why not ship me to Fallujah
on your campaign trail of tears
and broken dreams you raised me on?

Military's lookin like a bright side
to a statistical suicide
They used to call me back in
High school when nobody else would.
She was injected into my life in vain
A heroine to show me what I could have been.

I know now what could have been.
I ache for ignorance.
I walk down these streets every day
empty wallet empty palms
stretched out towards the something
I remember and may be again.

This was just a
passing feeling
Time and living
will get me healing.
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Old 12-09-2008, 12:37 PM   #2
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It has been a long time since I have red here something that I could enjoy.
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Old 12-09-2008, 12:51 PM   #3
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I like it, rather a lot actually.

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No More Girl
To inject like a heroine
into the vein of a vain life
must be my favourite stanza.
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Old 12-09-2008, 02:00 PM   #4
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I like it a lot.
It's damn good.
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Old 12-09-2008, 06:21 PM   #5
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Thank you for all the positive reviews. I'll post more later.

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I like it, rather a lot actually.

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must be my favourite stanza.
It actually wasn't until the day after I wrote it that I remembered 'girl' is a slang for heroin. It worked on more levels than I realized. That's how automatic writing is fantastic. The stuff your subconscious comes up with and you don't even realize it.
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