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Originally Posted by LadyLucretia
The punctuation makes the flow choppy. The rhymes - "see, be, me" - are overly simplistic and I think the poem would be better if it didn't rhyme. I would say either commit to free verse (unstructured poetry) or have a consistent meter and rhyme scheme.
But then again, I never like amateur poetry. Being an English major made me into what most people see as being a lit. snob, but I see as having taste. Either way it doesn't make me friends (except with other English majors).
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I agree, it does seem choppy. I usually don't punctuate when I write. After looking over some of my poetry, I've realized I seem to lean towards free verse.
I don't see you as being a lit. snob at all! I thank you for your feedback. That is why I posted this. I've never shared my poetry with anyone before, and I thought here would be a nice starting point. And I didn't even know that unstructured poetry had the name of 'free verse'.
So, I learned something new today! Thank you!