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Literature Please come visit. People get upset, write poetry about it, and post it here. Sometimes we also talk about books. |
07-14-2009, 05:56 PM
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To a Blonde, from my overwatered Gargen.
pink coneflower, pink
and lovely as you are
to look at
standing punctuated by daises
and nearly overpowered by my butterfly bush
Why is it that you're so easily tickled and fondled
by sticky-legged bees who want only to pollinate you,
but are so sharp and unforgiving
in my own gently closed hand?
Fuck. Obviously it's "Garden" in the title.
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07-15-2009, 03:02 AM
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I'd pollinate the living daylights outta you baby, but alas, I'm just one sex change operation away.
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07-15-2009, 04:09 PM
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What?
I don't understand.
I thought you had a penis.
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07-15-2009, 07:32 PM
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I thought that would be a confusing statement.
Yes, I have a penis, sort of, but I thought you only dug chicks. Besides, I think th poem can seemingly be interpretted as you wanting to either pollinate or be pollinated. I'm not sure which. Result = Conflicting statement.
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07-16-2009, 07:12 PM
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Quote:
Originally Posted by Mir
I thought that would be a confusing statement.
Yes, I have a penis, sort of, but I thought you only dug chicks. Besides, I think th poem can seemingly be interpretted as you wanting to either pollinate or be pollinated. I'm not sure which. Result = Conflicting statement.
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Nah.
I'm an open minded lesbian, haha.
For the most part, I'm attracted to women, but I'm not going to not be with a human I like because he has a dick.
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07-17-2009, 06:06 AM
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I like that you can express metaphorically as well as explicitly Ophie, and this one was metaphorically titillating! I really liked it.
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07-17-2009, 07:32 AM
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Quote:
Originally Posted by HumanePain
I like that you can express metaphorically as well as explicitly Ophie, and this one was metaphorically titillating! I really liked it.
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Thank you, Humane.
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07-17-2009, 03:08 PM
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I actually like the word Gargen better, it sounds like some monstrous and exotic plant.
I'd have to say the most interesting part is the first two lines of the first stanza, they're quite quirky and drew my attention, the other stuff isn't as great but it all works together and compliments the theme regardless.
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07-19-2009, 02:38 PM
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This really doesn't distinguish itself for me at all. The whole thing seems to blur together into the words 'OPHELIA POEM".
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07-19-2009, 03:41 PM
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Ah, at least I have a style, haha.
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07-20-2009, 10:34 AM
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Quote:
Originally Posted by Mir
I thought that would be a confusing statement.
Yes, I have a penis, sort of, but I thought you only dug chicks. Besides, I think th poem can seemingly be interpretted as you wanting to either pollinate or be pollinated. I'm not sure which. Result = Conflicting statement.
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May I ask how its possible to have a "sort of" penis? In my count, you either got or you dont. No matter if its 1 cm, you got it.
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07-20-2009, 05:51 PM
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Well, all women have a "sort of penis".
The clitoris is a rudimentary one.
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07-21-2009, 08:20 AM
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Quote:
Originally Posted by zerademark
May I ask how its possible to have a "sort of" penis? In my count, you either got or you dont. No matter if its 1 cm, you got it.
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I suppose he could have had a disfiguring accident.
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07-21-2009, 02:27 PM
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Quote:
Originally Posted by Underwater Ophelia
pink coneflower, pink
and lovely as you are
to look at
standing punctuated by daises
and nearly overpowered by my butterfly bush
Why is it that you're so easily tickled and fondled
by sticky-legged bees who want only to pollinate you,
but are so sharp and unforgiving
in my own gently closed hand?
Fuck. Obviously it's "Garden" in the title.
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This poem lead me to believe that somehow its about feeling being used for something which they really don't want to do.
But please do correct me if I am wrong.
By anyway, a sweet poem.
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07-21-2009, 02:35 PM
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Quote:
Originally Posted by Despanan
I suppose he could have had a disfiguring accident.
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Alright, enough about his penis >.<
This poem is nice, Ms. Ophelia.
But especially the title intriques me. "To a Blond...."
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2 "He/she" or "him/her" and all related sums shall be written instead like this: "She/he" and "Her/him"
3 It is not "You and me", instead it is "Me and you". At the same time "M" is capitalized.
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