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Old 12-08-2009, 06:53 AM   #1
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Sunset. Bloody sunset.

haven't been here in years! I missed this place!!



Look at those clouds.
What?
Just take a look at them.
I want to float eternally on those clouds,
Or cut them with all my envy and make them bleed all that beautiful, rich colour ,
Scar the sky for being so distant, so this beautiful, so gentle colour will flow from all the scars right on earth and will set every thing it touches on fire. Burning, gentle-coloured, beautiful fire.
And it will be cold. Everything will be cold, and the clouds will be gray because they bled all their beautiful colours to set the distant earth with its meaningful little lives on fire.
It will be the end of the world, set on fire and burning ice.

When I was out again the clouds were gray and the sky blue. I missed my opportunity to be the next Armageddon angel.
We all miss some opportunities, don’t we?


I left the program I was working on on the computer open and peeped out of the window. Nothing unusual, twilight with grayish clouds and dark blue sky. I couldn’t understand what this insane little girl was talking about. Well, at least she’s cute and knows how to cook.



As usual, I'll be glad to get any rational feedback, don't go say it's stupid just because you don't like sunsets.
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Old 12-08-2009, 10:01 AM   #2
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i'm not so good at poems but your really good
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Old 12-08-2009, 12:57 PM   #3
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This sounds like something I would have written in middle school.
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Old 12-08-2009, 08:47 PM   #4
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Shes still better then me.
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Old 12-09-2009, 02:22 AM   #5
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High school, and not that tipycal for me.
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Old 12-09-2009, 06:40 AM   #6
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It's not all bad. Make it less melodramatic sounding.
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Old 12-11-2009, 03:52 AM   #7
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I might overwrite it someday, add more descriptions to makt it closer to what I wanted it to be.
(I'm melodramatic lately, but that's just because my life's getting more and more into a mass. Guess it reflects in the things I write. Too bad.)
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