Hurt me Inside

[noirpluie]

What does she have that I don’t have
Honestly, we could make a list
She has everything that I don’t want anymore
She has you; she has you…

She has your smile, your touch, and your hands
With her every day she awakes
And in her dreams, she gets to see you
Loving her, loving her

She has everything that I want
And all that I want nothing to do with
She has everything that I had and lost
And I want it back; I don’t want it back

No, you don’t know how much it hurts
To fall so out of love
I don’t want what she has
Still, I want it all to come back
And the pain is like death
And the peace is keeping me alive
I can’t go on not loving you
And hurting inside

You hurt me inside

What does she know that I could never know?
That someone always loves her soul
She has love for you, a love to make her whole
Where does that leave; where does that leave me

She has the light, the dream, and the touch
Telling her that she’ll be okay
And in her dreams, I know she’s happy
Isn’t that sweet? It’s sickening me.

No, you don’t know how much it hurts
To fall so out of love
I don’t want what she has
Still, I want it all to come back
And the pain is like death
And the peace is keeping me alive
I can’t go on not loving you
And hurting inside

You hurt me inside

[Blackthorn_Childe]

Erm, well, I can't say I enjoyed it. I didn't find any sort of flow to it. The repetitiveness didn't really mesh well. It didn't really capture me in any way.
However, don't give up writing! If you're really passionate about writing, then find someone to help you, such as a lit teacher. My first poetry sucked. It was TERRIBLE. So, don't give up. Just keep working on it.

[ImmortalRogue]

i like your poetry i think i know how you feel

[Exho]

It's good for a song =P

[Apathy's_Child]

Originally Posted by noirpluie

What does she have that I don’t have

Talent?

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